Tuesday, 14 March 2017

Magic box mystery

Mondays Writing

Today in room 7 we were doing writing , miss Ashley said “we will be doing something called The Magic Box”, Miss Ashley said “she is going to blindfold us as she put something in the magic box”


The person come and stands up they need to put the blindfold on. And guess what it was?... some people didn’t know what it was, but some people like me can guess it easy

It was my turn, i stand up with pride and felt what it was, i got “is it a funnel” Miss Ashley said “ how do you guy know what this is!!!!”  i said it felt 9life plastic and pointy it was white and circle i didn't really get a long turn trying to guess what it was and also i just learn that Miss ashley used a coke box and painted it black so we can put all the stuff inside
Sentence starters to use:
  • As I stood waiting, my heart was
  • I put my hand nervously into the box, and I felt
  • When Miss Ashley put the blindfold on, it felt like
  • The class giggled as


Did I remember to include….
yes
Title
yes
Introduction
yes
Who, what, when, where, why, who, how
yes
3 paragraphs - burger model
yes
Conclusion
yes
Specific adjectives
smile/Metaphor No
Different punctuation yes
yes
Short sentence for effect
yes
Correct spelling throughout the story
yes
A sentence you have added in editing
yes
A sentence you have moved in editing
yes
Sentence starters given


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Tuesdays writing new!


Today in room 7 we were doing writing , miss Ashley said “we will be doing something called The Magic Box”, Miss Ashley saidshe is going to blindfold us as she put something in the magic box

The person come and stands up they need to put the blindfold on and pit there hand in she screamed. And guess what it was?... some people didn’t know what it was, but some people like me can guess it easy

It was my turn, i stand up with pride leaving my friends behind and felt what it was, i gotis it a funnelMiss Ashley saidhow do you guy know what this is!!!!”  i said it felt like plastic and pointy it was white and circle i didn't really get a long turn trying to guess what it was and also i just learn that Miss ashley used a coke box and painted it black so we can put all the stuff. After a while everyone got a turn, then MIss Ashley packed i away and we all started to write about what we did.

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